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Post by !!DerryChick!! on Jan 16, 2011 19:21:42 GMT -5
*Roselynn Marie's heart had belonged to her childhood friend Damian McGinty...they met in the first grade and became friends because Damian and Roselynn had so much in common even tho they were both six at the time. Every day from then they always talked about what happened to each other..Damian McGinty's heart belonged to his best friend Roselynn Marie.. now that they are both out of school they were both eighteen and they always had a grand time out with their other mates they always stck close to each others side, and the day Damian had to leave off for America he would always give her a kiss on the cheek and give her the warmest hug she ever had before* "I will be back so don't cry"said Damian as he wiped her tears away and hugs her as he himself is trying not to cry.."I know its just I hate seeing you go I miss you couse we always hang out and your special to me"said Roselynn as she is thinking 'Did I really just tell him he's special?? Gah I hope he didn't hear it tho' as she smiled a bit.."I know and you special to me and I hate leaving you behind"Damian said as he is hugging her still 'oh man I hope that didn't seem to gushy' he thought as he heard his plane was loading he looked in to Roselynn's big brown eyes as she looked in to his beautiful blue eyes and for a moment Damian had wanted to kiss the beauty girl that is his friend.. Roselynn always had rules about a guy had to kiss her first but she was willing to break it to kiss her Irish crush that is her friend.. Damian and Roselynn said their farewells for two months and Damian always called her and he would tell everything stories and all the good pranks.. °will write more for views and comments°
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Post by celticbear on Jan 16, 2011 20:54:01 GMT -5
Hi Ksherwood! Celticbear here! Welcome to Nox! I like your start! I hope you continue it. I also use the name of Celticbear,CB for short in the CT PUB! Drop in some time. and if you have the time got to the Poetry and Poetics section here on Nox and read my Poems! Looking forward to reading more of your writing.
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Jillian
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Damian Mc Ginty. T? mo chro? istigh ionat.
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Post by Jillian on Jan 16, 2011 21:11:41 GMT -5
Hiya Katie! Nice to see that you've decided to try out your hand at writing. :L (Bad pun, I know.) I'm going to be quite honest here, the character Roselynn Marie sounds a bit too much like a Mary-Sue. (Hence my suggestion to find a good betawriter.) Is 'Marie' Roselynn's surname? If so, then she is a character of Spanish lineage, correct? If your answer to that is a no, then you might want to think about explaining why that's her name. Here, I'll message you a quiz you can take to find out if Roselynn is in fact a Mary-Sue. It will help greatly in the long run! x
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Post by CelticPrincess24 on Jan 16, 2011 21:15:44 GMT -5
I love it so far. but it would be easier to read it you double spaced everytime someone new started talking, but if I'm the only who feels like this then you don't have to!
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Post by !!DerryChick!! on Jan 16, 2011 22:15:18 GMT -5
{Roselynn's POV} I had just gotten home from the airport where I last saw Damian.. as I stood there and grab my scrap books from my desk I had set them on my bed and I plopped down on my bed and realized my phone was on slient and I had one new text message it was from Damian I smiled and read the text 'hey Rosie just wanted to tell you goodnight ' I always smiled when he calls me rosie my parents thought that Roselynn was a sweet name and I was born by rose garden..I smiled as I liik throughout the scrapbooks me and Damian made together.. as I looked at the pictures of Damian and I and my heart just melts whenever I see these old memories.. {Damian's POV } As I get on the plane I text Rosie goodnight and I. smiles as I turn my phone off and grab my wallet and I. look at Rosie and I..'hmm I wonder if she even looks. at those old scrapbooks we made I bet she is..i already. miss her and its been an hour..' my thoughts. on her continued untill we landed.. °okay now y'all know how Rosie got her name! :-) comments and views for more story°
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Post by CelticPrincess24 on Jan 16, 2011 22:21:18 GMT -5
I love it! I can't wait for more!
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Post by celticbear on Jan 16, 2011 22:21:58 GMT -5
Katie, thanks for telling us how Rosie got her name. I love the relationship between Damo and Rosie and how unsure each of them is about wondering if there is more than just a friendship between them! Keep up the good work! UPDATE SOON! PLEASE!
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Post by !!DerryChick!! on Jan 16, 2011 23:06:16 GMT -5
Two month have passed and Damian was returning home
{Damian's POV}
'Finally I get too see her stunning self again! God I missed het' I thought about telling her how I feel when I got off the plane but then I thought it was too gushy and I'd feel really stupid if she didn't have the same feelings for me! As I hear we are landing I Buckle up and prepare myself for landing.
{Rosie's POV}
As I stand there waiting for him to come out..I was nervous because I wanted to tell Damian I love him no matter what I was determined to tell him. I see the people all around me but I still don't see him 'do I have the right plane?' I thought. And before I knew it I felt some one ticking me from behind and I squealed as I hear a familiar voice from behind me ear "Now I love that sound"said Damian as he stops tickling me and he hugs me.
"Damian I have to tell you something" I said. Damian gives me a concerning look.
"Damian I....."
°will Rosie tell Damian she loves him? Or will she back out??°
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Post by celticbear on Jan 16, 2011 23:09:51 GMT -5
Katie my Money is on that they will say how the feel about each other at the same time. But I could be wrong. Only you can solve the mystery of what is going to happen next! Keep those UPDATES COMING!
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Post by CelticPrincess24 on Jan 17, 2011 0:00:43 GMT -5
I love it and I can't wait for the next part!
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Post by !!DerryChick!! on Jan 17, 2011 1:26:18 GMT -5
{Damian's POV}
I looked at Rosie and I starred into those big brown eyes I missed so much..
"You what?" I asked..and the next thing I know she put her arms around my neck and my heart starts beating as fast as it could go..was she going to? Next thing I knew she pulled away and grabbed my bags..
{Roselynn's POV}
I sigh as I take Damian's luggage to my car as he is following me when he looked a little sad and 'maby he is disappointed I didn't kiss him' I thought..
As I drive us to his house he breaks the quietness..
"What was that all about back at the airport?" He asked me..I sigh hoping he forget all that..
"Well...I just..em..wanted to-*
"Kiss me?" He helped me finish.
"Yes.. look Damian I really like you for a long time to the point I love you." I blurted out...
°thank you all for the comments and views,what do y'all think Damian will say or what will he do?°
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Post by meg_cahill21 on Jan 17, 2011 10:05:41 GMT -5
awww i love this!!!! and welcome to the Nox!!! now update before i have to hunt u down with my hockey stick!!!!
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Post by CelticPrincess24 on Jan 17, 2011 11:30:31 GMT -5
Don't worry about miss meg and her hockey stick *whisper's to you* she does that a lot! Update soon!
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Post by angelenia100 on Jan 17, 2011 12:23:50 GMT -5
We need an update now!!!!!!!!
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Post by !!DerryChick!! on Jan 17, 2011 13:36:41 GMT -5
{Damian's POV}
"Wait you love me?" I asked the girl who pulled into my home drive way..
"Yes I do really love you and I understand if you-" I put my index finger over her sweet lips..
"Will you relax? Don't panic I have something to tell you." I chuckled.I leaned into her and I whispered to her ear "I love you with all of my heart and sole I want you to be mine for ever and always no matter how far away i am from you I always have you on my mind."
I saw tears form in her brown eyes and as I leaned in about ready to kiss her I hear my EX Screaming at the top of her lungs..I sighed and kissed my girl on the cheek...
{Rosie's POV}
I was stunned 'he loves me' I thought and as he was coming into kiss me I heard a scream which ruined our moment 'great' as I watch Damian walk over to talk to.her I couldn't help but listen in..
"What are you doing snogging her?" Asked Nicole in an angry tone.
"Oh I don't know..hmm maby because she's my girlfriend now!" Said Damian
"So what are we over?" she asked furiously
"We've been over for months! Please just let me go so we can both go on with our lives." He said
"But if things don't work out for you too I'm here for you." She gave him and I an evil grin as she turned and she ran off.
°What will Nicole do?? Or what is she plotting?? Comments and shall write!!!°
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