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Post by pfieffer on Aug 7, 2009 22:09:55 GMT -5
Okay so i got the idea for this story in fifth grade...AKA about eight years ago. Took me a while to tweek it. sooo.... anyways i came up with it after reading the hobbit and seeing Lord of the Rings. So yeah... you get where this story is going. The story is from Damian's point of view
I could not believe he had to read this stupid book for school. Lord of the Rings The Fellowship of the Ring. I had seen the movies wasn't that enough. I finally quit stalling and sat on my bed. Opened the book. It started off slow. But it got alot better. I was up to the part where they were holding the council and deciding who would go destroy the ring. I was reading out loud. I read the words spoken by Frodo, "I'll go." All of a sudden something stange happened. The book was torn fom my hands. It landed on the bed open. I picked it back up. And read on Frodo says the words again, I'll go this time. I felt something hit me on the head. I felt somehting pulling on me. I fell on the ground. When I woke up I was not in my bedroom. I pinched myself. I was not dreaming. Where was I. I saw tall trees every where. I was on dirt ground. I stood up and wiped myself off. Where was I. A blond man came running up. "Is this what I get." He did not seem to happy. "Um, where am I?" I asked. "Don't you know?" He asked back. Then he looked at me head to toe. "I guess you don't. Where do you come from." "My mom told me not to talk to strangers." I replied as I started trying to find my way out of this wooded city. I had to get home. "My name is Keith. Now we are not strangers." I slowly turned, "I am from Ireland, and my name is Damian. Now will you tell me where I am." "Of course." He replied, "This is Glassdale." I looked at him with a confused look. "You are still confused. Follow me. I know someone who can help." I rolled my eyes. "Will this person help me get home?" "Home?" Keith looked at me. "You obviously don't know why your here. Well to be honest. I don't really know either. I was told to come. And help would be sent. So I am guessing your my help." "No, No, No. I cannont be your help. I have to do a book report." "She is waiting. Let's go. She might be able to tell you how to get home." "I hope so." I said. As I followed Keith. While following him I noticed pointy ears. Great. This guy was an elf. I was lost, and following a blond elf. What my luck. We walked under an arch way that was made by trees. We walked towards a ring area. Standing their was, a tall brunette, with pointy ears, this guy looked like he was going to be a handful. And a bald man, with no pointy ears, but he had an ax. All of them were tall. You have got to be kidding me. I have died and gone to the looney bin. "Stay behind me." Keith said. I was now taking orders from an elf. But I stood behind him. We walked up. Keith motioned me forward. The three of them sat down. I looked around noticing I was the only one standing sat down. The bald guy rolled his eyes at me. Suddenly two women came through a stone archway.
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Post by pfieffer on Aug 11, 2009 23:46:01 GMT -5
One was wearing blue. Great another elf. I was sure I rolled my eyes. But she was pretty. She had a long flowing blue gown on. She also had flowing blond hair. Behind her, was a little girl. She had pink and purple dress on, and long strawberry blond hair that was in ringlet curls. She was so cute. She ran to the man with the ax, and whispered in his ear. The woman in blue spoke, "I am Megan, and this is Sarah." She had a voice that flowed with the wind. "The journey you are about to go on, will bring you troubles, strife, and mysteries. Some will be at the some time but some wont." The little girl, Sarah, started to speak with wisdom beyond her years, "The most important piece of advice we can give , is stick together, through thick and thin. Just be one, one fellowship, and when you don't know what else to do sing." This last part puzzled me and just about everyone else. And I thought elves were smart. Megan started to speak again, "We cannot tell you to much. Because we do not know that much. But what we can tell you is head to the woods of Studionian. The three guys seemed to know where that was. But I was clueless, completely and utterly clueless. "Time to get ready for your travels." The little redhead said. The bald guy with the ax, The tall brunette with pointy ears, and Keith followed Sarah. Megan whisked me away to another room. In it were stringed instruments the most prominent was a cello. "Can I ask you what exactly am I doing here?" "Of course. You have been summoned on request. By Sharon herself, because Phil mentioned you. Because he heard you singing." All of that go me confused. I acted like I understood. "But where exactly is here?" "Sharon told me about where you came from. Just think of it as, the medieval times." Did that mean I would have to wear those clothes I hoped not. The blond read my mind. "You can wear what you are wearing now. But you will need this." She handed me a bow and arrows, and A sword with a hilt. She then handed me a cloak. "Is that it. No armor. What happens when I need armor?" I asked I did not want to get hurt. Because if I got hurt or died here, what would happen in the real world. What time was it back home. Was I being missed. I was so worried. Megan simply replied, "The cloak." I turned around and put the cloak on. When I looked back she was gone. Great, now I was lost in this castle, tree, rock thing. I stepped out of the room and started walking. I was looking at my feet when I bumped into someone. "I am sorry." I stated. I looked up. The man just started laughing. He was the tall brunette with the pointy ears, "Hello, I am Paul." "I'm Damian." I replied. "You look a little lost." He said, "Follow me, and we will meet up with the others." He took a good long look at me. Then started walking. "I take your not from here." He stated. "Yeah." I replied. "Do you even know how to use those?" He motioned at the arrows and bow slung across my back. "Yeah, a little, but I am not very good." "Well let's see how good you are. Take the bow off." I did so with ease. I also grabbed an arrow. The entire time we were walking. We came to a courtyard. "Shoot at that tree on the other side." I took my aim and fired. It took all of two seconds. I hit the middle of the tree. To my pleasant surprise. Pall seemed a little upset. "Beginner's luck. Try again." I took my aim and fired. I was faster this time. I split my first arrow. Paul was even more upset. "Again. " He stated. I took aim and fired. I split the second arrow. My aim was dead on. "You need a moving target." He through something into the air. It looked like a paper airplane. Once again I took my aim and fired. I shot the paper to the ground. Paul's temper was flaring. The bald man came up behind us and put his hands on our shoulders, "Paul the lad is obviously a natural." He turned his focus to towards me,"I am George." He took his hand off Paul's shoulder and offered it to me. I shook it. "Mind if I take a look?" He gestured at my sword. "Sure." I replied. He drew the sword out of it's sheath sleekly. "Nicely made. Perfect balance." He held the blade on two fingers next to the hilt. He through the sword up and caught it at the handle. He then flipped it. Carefully caught it at the blade and handed it towards me. He moved it with ease but when I got hold it was heavy. "Do ya know how to use it?" I plainly answered, "No." "Well we will see about that. You were a natural with the bow,let's see about the sword." He pulled a sword out of a sheath on his side. I did not notice it before. He put the ax on his back. "Let's have a go at it." I did not know what to do. So I waited for him to make the first move. We walked in a circle. I can't really describe what happened next. But our swords clash. And no sooner had the fight begun, he was on the ground. I heard the voice of Keith yell, "Tell him to yield." "Yield." I declared. I jumped back and George jumped up. "You are very talented. I have not seen such talent since. Well. Never mind. You are gifted. Don't let it go to your head." He warned. What was that supposed to mean. I had never touched a sword in my life. Except for the foam ones you bye at costume stores to go with pirate costumes. We grouped together. Megan and Sarah appeared out of nowhere. " We wish you luck on your journey ahead." They said. And with that we were off. We had walked a ways. We came to a split in the path. One lead over the mountain before us. One lead around it. "It will be shorter if we go over." Keith said. I grabbed a stick, you never a know when a good hiking stick would come in handy. We started up the trail. Keith was in the lead, followed by George, then me then Paul. I regretted being behind Paul the entire time. He was still angry because of my mad archery skills. So every few minutes we would poke me. When we were on the mountain Keith had run ahead. I guess being an elf he is fast. He along with Paul walked on top of the snow they did not sink like George and I. All of a sudden Keith came back, "It is a good two days. If we walk day and night." Just then Paul poked me. My anger overloaded. "WOULD YOU STOP!" I yelled. Suddenly we heard a rumbling sound.
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Post by pfieffer on Aug 17, 2009 1:13:25 GMT -5
Dang no one is reading again
Paul's ears pricked up "Sounds like an avalanche." He listened closer. It partly was an avalanche. Great I had started an avalanche. My time here was going to be just peachy. George then Pulled me close the mountain. Keith and Paul followed in pursuit. "I changed my mind." "I was hoping you would." Keith said. As tons of snow fell before us. "Why? It is just an avalanche we are all still alive." I said. All three of them stared at me. We then started making our way back down the mountain. We were going fast. Keith started, "You don't have the trained ears of an elf so I will tell what you just did." He seemed mad. "Don't get mad at him." Paul told Keith. Although he did not seem to happy himself. "You awoke a great monster. The Sneachta" I just gave him a weird look. George was still staring at me. But he was doing with so with an understanding. "Lad, it is dangerous. And waking it is never wise. Which is why we must get off the mountain." I understood. I was scared now. So I started to run. It was hard at first. But it soon got easy. I had know idea why until I looked at my feet. I was no longer running in the snow. I was on top of it. Like Paul and Keith. The three of them looked at me like I was weird. I was up in front. When we heard the sounds of base drums, the pounding feet of the Sneachta. I rand faster. I looked back. And saw the monster catching up to George. So many thoughts went through my mind. I grabbed my bow and two arrows. I took a shot. I heard the beast moan. But the beast was still moving. Like lightning I switched my bow for my sword. I ran straight towards the beast. I leaped over George and plunged my sword, into the left leg of the beast. It immediately fell. George just looked at me in awe. "RUN!" I yelled. We both ran. Keith and Paul had made it to the bottom of the mountain hours before us. I stayed with George he seemed to have gotten a deep cut on his leg. George and I sat down on some rocks. But Paul and Keith insisted we keep moving. The bleeding on George's leg had to stop. I took my shirt off. Still wearing a white v-neck undershirt. I used the shirt I was wearing to tie up George's leg to apply pressure. He assured me he was fine. And we headed into a valley. The opposite end of the valley was dark. "What's going on up their?" I asked. "That. That is what we have to go through to go into the mountain. That my friend is our alternate route. Because our fastest route happens to be destroyed." Paul looked at me. I was sorry but, honestly it was not my fault that he was poking me. I was walking ahead. I heard Paul, Keith, and George talking. It sounded serious. They seemed to be talking about me. I wanted to listen. But it was hard. I only heard bits and pieces of the conversation. But their was one part that stuck out at me more than the rest. Paul stated, "Where did you say he was from again." "He never really told me. He said Ireland. But I don't know where it is. Never heard of it." Keith replied. "That sounds familiar. But I must be imagining it." George stated. "All I know is He was on the ground when I found him." Keith continued. "Well, I know, Is he is strange. He has abilities. How fast he can run, and on top of snow. His aim and skill with the bow. And how he maneuvers the sword. I have only known of one other like him." Paul sort of shuttered. "I know who your talking about." Keith said. George seemed to know the most, "Let's just hope it does not go to his head. We don't need another Dark Destroyer."
DUN DUN DUN. CLIFFHANGER. hahaha... remember no mean stuff meant to any of the guys. I HOPE Y"ALL LIKE IT. PLEAE PLEASE PLEASE comment. love ya. ps. Sneachta is the gealic for snow
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Post by pfieffer on Aug 21, 2009 22:13:06 GMT -5
I was so confused. Who was this dark destroyer, and how was he like me. I honestly did not know how I could do all this. we came up to the dark side of the valley. Their was a pond or lake type thing, I did not know what to call it. On the other side their was a closed off mountain. "Okay, how is this the alternate route their is know way to get through." I motioned towards the mountainside. "Also how are we supposed to get passed this pond." Their was know way around the pond, and their was no method of transportation to get across the pond. George took his ax and set it on the water, some how it floated. The water rippled around the ax and the ax started to float away. George followed it, his fit sunk a little but for the most part he floated. Keith and Paul followed in pursuit, except they did not even touch the water, they kind flew over it. I on the other hand did not follow in pursuit. "No, I refuse to go across, who knows what could be in their." I did not mention that I had recently been pushed into a lake that looked similar to this. "Oh come on." Keith said. Paul walked towards me, "Here I will help you." "No, no, no. I will just stay here, you can go on with out me. I mean you don't really need me." "Yes we do lad, come on." George said. I carefully placed one foot on the water, and I started to walk. Paul was following, I did not feel safe, with him following. Suddenly, I found my self all wet. Paul had pushed me, "What did you do that for?" I yelled. "Just a little fun." He splashed me. I splashed him back. "Lads, stop it!" George yelled. Paul and I stopped immediately. It got really quite. I stood up with Paul's help, and we started to run to the other side. I had gotten half way across, when we all heard a splash. Their was again another splash. I kept running, the splashes were getting closer. I was taking a step with my right leg but, it would not move. I tried to pull my leg, but I was being drug down. I looked at my ankle, grasping it was a hand, that looked bony. I did not know what to do I was speechless, by now Paul, Keith, and George had reached the other side. I was still in the middle of the pond struggling. Not saying anything, I was slowly being pulled under. "Damian come on." George said. "I can't." I struggled, "Something has my leg." Al of a sudden Keith plunged into the lake. I was going deeper and deeper, now up to my waist. Keith came up for a breath of air and yelled, "Damian don't move." That worried me. What had my leg. Keith dove back under. What ever had gotten me was pulling hard. I was still struggling despite Keith's advice. I was up to my neck, get more scared every minute. Suddenly my body was overtaken by things grabbing me. I had gone under the water. I opened my eyes to see what was grabbing me, their were skeletons, with a little bit of flesh on them. What were these things. As I ran out of breath, I still saw know sign of Keith. The things were swimming around me, I did not know what they were doing. But every time one of them touched my energy seemed to disappear. Keith was still not their. Then one of the creatures, took me by the shoulders, it took it's hand like thing, and scratched my right cheek. Their was great pain. It felt as if my flesh was ripping off. Suddenly their was a surge in the water. Then nothing, because I had finally passed out, either from the things attacking me or lack of oxygen. I don't remember Keith being their. But I felt another surge of water, and hands grabbbing me. I felt as if I was being pulled apart. I could still feel things, I just could not open my eyes. I felt my body collapsing. I must have been very deep. Before I don't remember anything, I felt my body seeming as it had been ripped in two, and yet another surge of water.
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Post by pfieffer on Aug 23, 2009 1:57:00 GMT -5
PLEASE COMMENT GUYS... please tell me what ya think.
I woke up on the shore next to the mountain side, "What happened." "You my friend almost died." Paul said. "If, it weren't for Keith you would still be in that lake." Before I asked any more questions, "It is your fault Paul." "How is my fault?" He asked surprisingly. "Well," George answered, "You were the one who pushed him, causing the disturbance." With that I had to start asking my questions, "What just happened?" i figured that would cover just about everything. "I will explain." Keith stated, "That lake their is called Loch Toirneach. It is more dangerous than any waters her in Lar Eire." So that is what this whole place is called. Keith continued "The things that were grabbing you were the Beo Anam. When you splashed they were disturbed. They grabbed you under, with every touch they were taking a tiny bit of your soul. Now their is something you should know about me I am not fully elf, their is a tiny bit of Bruth, in my. They are people who live with the water, literally. That tiny bit, plays a prominent role in my life, because you see I can manipulate water, and do other things with water. I tried to get rid of the one that scratched your face, but I couldn't" "Is that bad?" I asked. The guys looked at each other. "Well..." Keith started.
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Post by pfieffer on Sept 7, 2009 18:39:00 GMT -5
alright this is the story i am going to work on. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE READ AND COMMENT
"It's not good." "What's that supposed to mean?" I asked, putting my hand to my face feeling the scratch, it burned. "Don't touch it." Paul told me. "Why not?" I asked. "Because, lad, every time you touch it the infection will get worse." George sternly replied. "What infection? What is going on." Everything they told me, made me ask more questions. "I want a straight answer." They were avoiding the right answer. "Umm.." Paul started to mumble. I got mad and yelled, "I want a straight answer!" "Lad calm down." George tried to calm me, but I was getting angrier. Keith grabbed George by the arm, and pulled him away from me. He then whispered to George, "This is exactly how he was." "I don't care Keith, he is different." George replied getting upset with Keith. I was puzzled. Keith then walked away in a huff, and George turned back to me, "Let's just say we need to get to the Studionian as fast as possible." This worried me. And even worse the scratch on my face started itch i wanted to scratch it, but whatever the infection was, I did not want to spread it. I started kicking a rock I found along the path. It took my mind of the scratch on my face. We finally came to the stone wall where the cave entrance was supposed to be. Let me tell you I saw no such entrance. Paul walked up to the center of the large granite mountain side, and whispered "Cara."
sort of cliffhanger... lol, oh and if you want to know about some of the strange words in the story just ask me. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE COMMENT. I am BEGGING. love ya
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Post by pfieffer on Sept 12, 2009 23:03:24 GMT -5
The large granite side of the mountain suddenly seemed to open to about the size of a door. We halfway walked and halfway crawled into the mountain. I found a rock along the, well it wasn't really a path but that is what I will call it, path and started kicking it. It seemed that playing with this makeshift football, the scratch on my face did not bother me. We walked for what seemed like days. And we just stopped. "Are we their yet?" "No," Keith said half joking and half upset, "Paul here forgot the way." "I did not forget the way, the way out has just seemed to escape my mind." "Paul, you bozo we are going to be down here forever." Keith said as he walked off. George got upset with Keith and hit him on the arm, "The exit is this way." "How do you know that?" Keith asked. "Because their is a draft." George replied bumping into me. The rock I was juggling fell into a large hole that stretched from one side of the cave to the other. It was a more of pit, and we were standing on rock bridge that stretched across it. We all heard the rock on it's way down, as it hit other things. When it reached the bottom we heard a soft thud, something we did not expect. "Run."Keith said in a tone barely audible. Now usually I would have second guessed what he or any of the guys would have said, but being inside a mountain, I ran. we reached the other side, we climbed to up the side of the cavern as we did, I looked down into the pit, and saw a blue, red, and yellow glow. We climbed into the next hall way, the exit was close. I started to sprint. I heard the three heavy breaths behind me. I finally reached the exit, but heard no breath so I turned around to see where they were. They were not running. The three of them were being held by the arms of an octopus dragon type thing. I saw George hang his head as he yelled to Keith,"He is no different." That hit me like a ton of bricks. But what was I to do. I ran towards the beast. Trying to think of something, suddenly I remembered what Sarah had said, stick together, and when all else fails. Well everything was failing and no matter how annoying these guys were I was not going to leave them. So I sang the first tune that popped into my mind, "Side by side We stand like brothers One for all and all together We will stay united through darker days And we'll be unbeatable forever Ireland, Ireland Together standing tall Shoulder to shoulder We'll answer Ireland's call! Come the day and come the hour Some will live in song and story We were born to follow our guiding star And to beat our destiny with glory Ireland, Ireland Together standing tall Shoulder to shoulder We'll answer Ireland's call! Hearts of steel and heads are bowing Vowing never to be broken We will fight, until we can fight no more Till our final requiem is spoken Ireland, Ireland Together standing tall Shoulder to shoulder We'll answer Ireland's call! Ireland, Ireland Together standing tall Shoulder to shoulder We'll answer Ireland's call! We'll answer Ireland's call!" As I was singing, I started to notice the monster's grip loosen. It finally let the guys go. They ran past me, as I was singing the last part of the song. When I finished the monster was coming after me. I turned on my heal and started to run. The exit before me was getting smaller and smaller. Were they just going to leave me hear. I looked over my shoulder the beast was still in pursuit. Suddenly I was swept off my feet.
dun dun dun... i am evil. hope y'all liked it... PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE comment and tell me what ya think. I AM BEGGING> love ya.
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Post by pfieffer on Sept 28, 2009 22:14:03 GMT -5
I closed my eyes, and when I opened them, I noticed I was heading towards the opening. I looked back to see the monster was in pursuit. With the way I was being held I could not see who was carrying me, but I know we made it out in time. He set me on the ground on the other side of the mountain as the whole closed. I looked up to see George smiling down on me. "You are different." He said, "I am sorry." He nudged Keith who had moved to next to him. "The Dark Destroyer would never have done that." "I know." Keith said, "Lad, will ya forgive me." "Of course." I said. Paul had just come out of a train of thought, "Can I ask you something?" "Sure, if I can ask you something." "Alright, How did you get a voice like that, and how did you know that is what it to for the Sliabh?" "The what?" I asked. "That thing in their." Keith said. "Oh." I replied, "Well, as for the voice I have been singing for a long time, and well, Sarah said when all else fails sing, so that is what I did." "Good to know." George said. "Now what did you want to ask." Paul stated. "What is the point of all this, and who is the dark destroyer?" At that, the three men, just looked at each other. George wisely answered my question, "When we get to Studionian your questions will be answered." Great just what I wanted no answer. The scratch started to burn. I was getting mad. I think Paul could tell cause he put his arm around me, "Lad, ya need to stay calm. That cut will only get worse." "How can I stay calm. When I am not told anything, I am left in the dark." "I know where you are coming from." "No you don't!" I yelled. "Hush," He held me tighter, "Not much longer. I was fuming with anger, When I just collapsed. I woke up under a canopy of dark green trees. Then I saw Keith's face, "Dude, you just passed out, that cut was alot worse than any of us thought." "What happened?" I asked. "Well," It was Paul, "You were furious, and you collapsed, at that point we knew it was bad so we picked up the pace and here we are." "Welcome to Studionian." George said. "Come on, we need to meet with the queen." I slowly got up, and subconsciously felt my face, their was no cut, not even a trace of a scar. I was so confused. Before I could ask anything. Paul, Keith, and George rushed me out. We climbed massive steps that wound around tree trunks, till we came to a green canopy, that was not made of leaves but of some kind of magic. We then heard the sound of bagpipes. One familiar sound in a place that was so unfamiliar. The guys smiled. There was a small stage that seemed to be made of stone. Then two people entered.
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Post by pfieffer on Sept 29, 2009 22:19:29 GMT -5
From the left came a women wearing all white, she had medium length blond hair. I assumed she was the queen. From the right came an older looking man, also all in white. "Good evening" The women said. As soon as she talked, somewhere inside me their was a burn, but the cut was not their. I must have been standing on my toes do to the burning sensation cause George pressed my shoulders to make me stand flat footed again. "I am Sharon. Queen of Studionian." With each word she said made the burn deep inside hurt even worse. It was making me angry which also made the burn even worse. I tried not to think about it. "You are free to stay here as long as you like, but I caution you to hurry. For I have a mission for you." "The lady in red was kidnapped by the dark destroyer." The old man said. "Phil and I need you to save her. Phil will tell you what I need you to do." Phil walked of the stage and in between me Paul we all turned and started to follow. "Damian I need you to stay here." I wanted to ask what for but I knew that would be extremely disrespectful. "I have a special mission for you. As well as saving the Lady in Red, I need you to save the soul of the dark destroyer. He started off like you, but you have already proved to be different from him." I was so confused, "Might I ask who the dark destroyer is?" "You will find out in due time." Sharon replied. I let out of scream of anger and pain. I was tired of not getting straight answers. Once again I collapsed. I woke up in the same place as before. I saw Phil's face looking at me. "You lads should have said that is what happened to him first thing. It might be to late. I have done the best I can, let's just hope he has the strength to fight it, many don't I think you all know who." The guys face were glum. I suspected that Phil was talking about The Dark Destroyer. A little while later everyone went to bed, but I could not sleep. I sat up and decided to walk around. I walked down in between to of the tree trunks, their was a maze of roots. I walked through them. I came to the center, their was a stone podium with a piece of paper on it. I walked up, and on the paper was written I've traveled hard with conscience flying somewhere in the wind. It stuck with me. I tried to put a tune to it but failed. As I was turning to walk out of the maze I saw the figures of Sharon and Phil standing their. "Try this tune." Phil said, then hummed a tune. So I sang the words with the tune. "Very good Damian. Can you follow me please." Sharon said. With out question I followed her out of the maze, it was daylight. We walked up steps to a castle that looked like shack. We walked in. Already their was Paul, George, and Keith. "I have gifts for each of you." We all looked at each other, it felt like Christmas. "To Paul, I bestow a bow blessed with a string of the best violin in the world, I also give him arrows. To George I give the strongest and best sword in this world, with it you cannot be defeated. To Keith I give this enchanted giotár." She paused. What she gave Keith looked like a guitar and his face lit up when he received it. I eagerly awaited what was going to be given to me. "And Damian this is what I give to you." I looked at it, and looked back up, she was gone. What was this thing. "Come on lad we have a long journey ahead of us." George said. So we left, i was still wondering what my gift was. I sat it on the ground for it resembled a ball, and I started to kick it. Our first trouble on the second leg of our journey came all to soon.
sorry no cliffhanger this time, but i hope you like it. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE tell me what ya think. comment i am BEGGING. love ya.
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Post by pfieffer on Oct 1, 2009 0:42:22 GMT -5
We walked and walked, my feet were starting to hurt. All of a sudden their was a great wind. "What's going on?" I asked. "We need to find a place to hide." Keith warned. "Why?" I was so confused, but I was trying not to get angry. "Cause we count out run it." George said. "Out run what?" Why wont they tell me anything. "This way." Paul motioned. We all hid under a huge tree root. "Don't move." Keith warned. I would not question him, but I wanted to know what was going on. Above us we heard the snorting of a horse. We heard a footstep on the ground. Whatever it was, must have jumped off the horse. It was walking around, and it came extremely close to us. It jumped back on the horse, and galloped away. "Okay what was that." "That was a giotár marcach." Paul told me. "What in the world is that?" I asked. "Something we do not want following us." George said. "What is so bad about it?" "Well, for starters they have not really decided where their trust lies, so they are very fickle. And worse the one that just came was the leader." "What is their story?" I asked. "It's a long one." Paul said. "We have time." I reasoned. "Alright, well it all started..." George began.
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Post by pfieffer on Oct 11, 2009 2:22:04 GMT -5
"A few years ago. More of your kind came" He gestured at me, "These men however were split, they did not know whether to join the Dark Destroyer or to join Sharon. They ride the fence. You never know if you can trust them. Sharon supplied each of them with a horse and something to help their talent, They can all play instruments, their leader can play more than one. Now their leader his name is Neil. He is close friends with R... the Dark Destroyer." I wonder why he messed up, I thought harder, and realized the the Dark Destroyer must not be the guys actual name, his name must start with an R, but I wondered what his name was. I started listing out names that began with an R in my head till George started talking again. He coughed, "So he naturally sides with him, but if it were not for Phil, Neil would still be out wondering the fields with his buddies, the giotár marcach. So now Neil spends his days riding on the fence." George had barely finished his tale. We did not here the galloping this time, but I was swept off my feet, and carried away, leaving George, Paul, and Keith behind. I was holding on to a man dressed in black on a horse for dear life. I fell asleep and when I woke up I was on the floor of what seemed like a dungeon. I was cold, wet and alone, now compare this to reading the book, in my warm house in my jammies snuggled up on my bed, easy pick. I then heard footsteps.
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Post by pfieffer on Oct 25, 2009 1:35:28 GMT -5
Walking up to my cell was a man dressed all in black. I looked up. His hair was like that of raven's not black, but almost. He had a defined chin, and he smirked. "Stand up." He said, I did not question him, their was no way I was going to get in trouble. I stood up. He smiled, and laughed, "So this is the warrior Sharon sends." I looked at him puzzled, how did he find that out. "You don't know what's going on do you?" I shook may head. "What's your name?" he curiously asked. I gulped, "Damian." I stuttered. I looked at him more closely, he was maybe an inch shorter than me. I wanted to ask who he was but fear of getting in trouble I refrained. He reached towards the iron bars and opened the cell that I was standing in. He gave his hand to me, and I took it, "Follow me." I followed without question, not saying anything. We walked through a large dark corridor, lighted by torches, burning with a red flame, cast evil shadows, and blood red light on the face of the man in black. We reached a grand room. "Sit and I will tell you all you want to know." He motioned to a chair, at the other end of the room. I started walking, as a got closer a noticed a lady in a red dress sitting. I came closer, and whispered, "Are you the lady in red?" She nodded, and whispered, "Do not sit down." I then noticed that the chair in which she was sitting, had trapped her. A semi clear coating had covered her and trapped her to the chair. "What is taking so long." The man's anger was not showing although it was relevant. "I can't afford to get in trouble" I whispered back, as I sat on the chair. I sunk down into it. The clear coating started to grow over me. Soon I was immobile. "If you don't know who I am by now, you are probably wondering. Am I right?" I nodded. "I am..."
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Post by pfieffer on Nov 5, 2009 22:09:40 GMT -5
"Ryan, and you and I are very similar. I know what you have been through. I know where you come from." I was utterly confused. This guy was loony, he must have been down here to long. He stepped into the light, a mischeivioius shadow crossed his face, it cover half his face, giving him the true essence of the Dark Destroyer. "You look puzzled, your eyes say it all." In truth my emotions could always be seen on my face. I had big blue eyes, and I knew it. I had a feeling those blue eyes that were loved by so many would now be used against me. "Look, I know that you do not live hear, it is evident by what you are wearing. In fact we are from the same place, Ireland. And let me guess," his voice got deeper, more synical, "Sharon, called you here." Where was he getting this information, the more he told me the more puzzled I got. "What did she ask you to do." His anger was growing, "Get me to come back. Well that wont happen. And you know why, Because I am trapped here. Just like you." I could not stay silent and longer, "WHAT!?!" "You heard me correctly, you can't go back, all your loved ones, you'll never see again." I looked over at the girl next to me, she was crying, I started to figure out why he had taken her. "Maybe I can help." I was improvising, this probably would not end well, but I was trying. His expression changed, he became inquisitive, "What do you mean." I was done for, I had not planned this far, I was hoping my comment would go unoticed. "Um, well maybe." I started to utter words I would regret.
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Post by pfieffer on Nov 13, 2009 21:21:49 GMT -5
"I can help you get her back." He stepped into the light, I could see his face more clearly now. He smirked. I tried to sink into the chair, but couldn't remembering I was trapped. I looked over at the women in scarlet she was looking at me confused and she was crying. I attempted to give her a reassuring look. "How do you plan on doing that." Great more words I would regret. I then remember what Phil said about the Dark Destroyer, and how he said that he hoped that he wasn't to late when he was fixing that cut. Maybe I was being tested, but I could not back out now. I was in too deep, hopefully this would all work out in the end, "I can get her where it hurts the most." His smirk turned into a smile that was to nice to be evil. He waved his hands over the chair I was in and the clear thing that was trapping me receded, and I was free. He came over and put his arm around me,"Make me proud." he said, as I blacked out. I woke up on the side of the road alone. I heard a whizzing sound. My eyesight focused and a saw something gray rolling towards me. It was coming closer, suddenly it launched into the air as if it was kicked. It was heading straight for my face. I put my hands up to catch it, which I did, thinking I would make a descent goalie. I looked over what it was and realized it was Sharon's gift to me. What was this thing, since I did not know I decided I would call it Charlie. I heard running foot steps coming from the same direction Charlie came from. I stood up. And started walking in the direction of the people running towards me. I guessed who they were. "Damian!" They yelled. It was Paul, Keith, and George I was not ready to talk to them yet. With each step I took towards them I felt guilt, and my heart raced faster. We finally met. They were so happy to see me. "Glad to see ya, what happened." Keith said. "Good think Sharon gave you that... umm" George said. "I named it Charlie." I replied. "It led us here." Paul said. "Actually it lead us everywhere." "I think it was trying to find you." Keith added. "So what happened you were gone for over a week?" George asked. Was I really gone that long, it did not seem that long. "Umm, I rather not talk about it." I said glumly. "Oh come on you can tell us." Paul joked. "I dont want to talk about it!" I yelled. They layed off, "Well why don't we tell ye what we did while you were gone." George suggested putting a fatherly hand on my shoulder. "Alright." I replied, "What did you lot do." They seemed worried for me. "Well..." Paul started
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Post by pfieffer on Nov 24, 2009 2:03:40 GMT -5
"Neil just swept you up. No one saw it coming. As soon as we figured out what happened we ran in the direction Neil went. We ran for a while, but Neil was to fast their was no way we could catch up. It was just about then that, what did you call it." "Charlie." I replied to Paul. "Charlie, came zipping towards us, he took us off the beaten path." "That is when that thing" Keith was threatening Charlie, "Got us lost, utterly lost. It was miserable. Never have a felt so stupid following that, that thing." He seemed to be cursing Charlie. "That is what we hear the entire time." George joked. I felt as if we were being watched, to make sure I followed through. These guys were clueless to what I had said, they were so accepting. Their jokes, and laughter just gave me pain, I knew I would regret everything I had told Ryan, and this was just the beginning. I mean our friend ships would grow, they would trust me more. Then I would betray them, they would be hurt. Keith would have seen it coming, I still don't think he trusts me. George would be the most hurt, saying I was different from the beginning, then I would go and betray him. And Paul, the most jolly guy I have ever met, would not laugh, he would not smile, the world would be sad, because he would be sad. These thoughts brought my already down spirit even lower, I would soon find that it would become hard to keep a smile on my face. "Any ways, we started walking till we came to a river," Paul continued. "Now, Charlie or what ever you call it, just zoomed on across, so we tried to follow, well the second we touched the river the tide rose, and the current picked up." "How did we get across you ask?"Keith commented. I did not ask, I don't think I would be able to talk to them again. "Good thing, I knew the secret of the river." "Stop bragging Keith." George said, "We all know." "Um, I don't." I commented. "Now why did ya go and say that?" Paul asked, "We get to here the hole story of his heritage, makes a great bed time story." "Fine I wont tell, any ways, family lived under the water, and well I had a talk with them." "We thought he was going to die." George added. "I mean the way the water surrounded him, kinda like..." He stopped looking at my forlorn face, he knew he shouldn't say anything about that incident quite yet. And it was true, I did not want to hear it. "Anyways, I told them we were not intruding, we just needed to cross. And they let us cross." Keith finished. "Next," George was taking up the story, "It lead us to a series of cliffs and valleys. Good thing to, My home resides in the cliffs. The great Dobhar Bán. To bad we had no time to visit with friends. We would run down one side and up the other, quite annoyin' if ye ask me." "Well no one is askin' ya mate." Keith told him. "We looked all over still no sign of you. You seemed to have disappeared into thin air." They carred so much for me, this betrayal, might hurt me even more, hopefully they would find out I had no other choice. I am not sure Keith would. "The next thing that happened to us was the most interesting thing of all. " Paul said, finishing the story. "Charlie, lead us every where, but the place it lead next was scary. It was a place no one goes." "Where was it?" I mumbled. Keith looked to the left, and right, then to the north and south, and whispered in my ear, "Cruinneachán de Pléisiúr Sliabh" "What is that?" I asked again. Keith whispered again, "The home of the dark destroyer. Our destination, but we dare not go near. To bad Charlie did." I gulped, I have a feeling that is where I was. "So me being my, not realizing where we were I followed." "This is when I began to feel stupid." Keith added, "And it was not because of where we were, it was because I decided to go on this trip with him" He motioned to Paul. "Are you calling me stupid?" Paul asked insulted. "Yes I am." Keith replied, with a tone of certainty. "Well, your stupid for following me." Paul retorted. "I can not believe you called me stupid." "Believe it." I did not want these two arguing. They needed to be friends, so they could trust each other when the no longer trusted me. They kept arguing. And I was getting mad, I could feel my blood boil. "Shut up!" I yelled, "Just shut up! No one is in the mood for you two arguing, and no wants to hear it!" Instantly they got quiet. "Now just finish the story." I looked at George, his face dropped, he knew that cut was affecting me, I could see it in his eyes. "Well, all of sudden Charlie zipped passed me, almost knocking my head off." Paul continued. "I then saw why. For coming at me was Giofóg Foiche. I was frozen. By then they had caught up to me. Not knowing what to do, I remembered how you saved us, and the advice that Sarah gave us. The song I started to sing, seemed to come from the sky. I had heard if before, never finding the source." "In fact, everyone has heard the song, never knowing the source." George and Keith added. "Mind I ask what song?" "No not at all." Keith said. "Paul continue." George encouraged, "We don't know the name, but when the time comes I think we will sing it." Paul continued, "I started to sing. Melodies flowing out of my mouth. Guys if you don't mind." The three of them started to sing, "I sit here thinking As the sun is sinkin' Over the mountain And the dry, dusty ground As the night is falling I start recalling The nights In my own home town I see their faces In familiar places I hear the music That be playing way back then My heart rejoices As I hear the voices Calling me Home again Home Oh take me home Home to the people I left behind Home to the love I know I'll find Oooh take me home As the sky is burning My mind is turning To the cold winter evenings By my own fire side So far away now But any day now I'll sail On the morning tide Home Oh take me home Home to the people I left behind Home to the love I know I'll find Oooh take me home Take me home Far across the sea Home is where I long to be Home Oh take me home Home to the people I left behind Home to the love I know I'll find Oooh take me home Home Oh take me home Home to the people I left behind Home to the love I know I'll find Oooh take me home" Their voices, were amazing, but something seemed to be missing. However that did not matter. I was crying, on the inside, and obviously the emotion over took me. Because I found my self sitting on the ground sobbing. "We sang the song, cause we wanted to return home, from that beast." Paul finished. I was crying even harder now, and it seemed as though they did not care, maybe Ryan was right. I wanted to go home so badly. I wanted to see my mum and my dad. But that wont happen. Why did it have to be that song. "What's the matter lad." George said, kneeling down. I looked up at him, my blue eyes wet with tears, my cheeks stained. "I want to go home." I cried even harder. "Aw, lad you'll go home, I promise." "Don't say that!" I yelled. He could not promise that. Ryan had been here who knows how long. He had no gone home, had he been promised this as well. "What do you want us to say?" Paul asked. "I don't know." I sobbed, "Just don't make promises you can't keep." "Sharon said you were going to go home." Paul told me. I did not want to here this, "Oh really, is that what she told Neil, and the rest of his group too." Then I said something else, dare I go their, yes. "Is that what Sharon told the Dark Destroyer?"
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