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Post by VolleyErica3 on Aug 31, 2009 15:57:58 GMT -5
This would be the sequal to what happened in Bali, its told in ketih's POV during what happened in bali
"Are you related?" The nurse asked me as i saw my newly wed wife laying on a hospital bed unconscious. "yes, I'm her husband." Man, did it feel great to say that. I had just married the most beautiful musician in the world and if was the best thing that i had ever done. Jessica is kind of short has long, brown wavy, hair, her eyes matched the color of the kelp in the bottom of the sea. She's a student at VanderCook music College back home where we're going to live in Chicago. She plays clarinet and a bunch of other instruments as well. But currently she and I are currently in Bali Indonesia celebrating our honeymoon, well sort of, We were surfing the oceans yesterday and she was right behind me in a huge wave and all of a sudden, I couldn't find her, I started panicking, one of the worst things u can do in the ocean. I started looking best I could but I didn't see where she went. And then out of no where I heard my name being called, I knew it was Jess I recognized the voice. Immediately I started paddling toward where I heard my name. I started seeing pieces of Jessica's pink and green striped surfboard with our initials on it in the water, this couldn't be good at all. I then saw her face break the surface and I swam faster she was reaching for me and I was returning the favor, I pulled her up onto my board as fast as I could. I saw that she was badly scraped up, her leg also looked twisted, possibly broken but I was no doctor, I had to get her out of the water and to a hospital fast. This couldn't be happening this was horrible! and it was all my fault. She should've never followed me into that wave. It was way too big for a beginner! I kept paddling toward the shore. I had no idea if Jessica was conscious or not. I tried calling her name to her, but I got nothing. When I finally reached the shore I had Jess in my arms and I was close to running toward the little shack. "Could ye help me out lad?" I asked the man at the shack. "My wife, she was knocked under by a big wave, I don't know her condition, I think its bad, can ye call and ambulance for me?" "Surely, good luck with her boy" The man replied. "Thank you so much, lad." I kept Jessica in my arms without letting go her leg was still twisted and messed up, and she had some really bad cuts and bruises starting to form all over her body. I then saw the ambulance.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Sept 3, 2009 14:28:39 GMT -5
For anybody who has been reading my story, i have an update:
They came rushing with a stretcher and started asking me questions. "Sir, what is her name and age?" one of them asked me. "Her name is Jessica Harkin, used to be Jessica Cross, she just married me late last month. She's 21." I tried to stay calm, but it was difficult. "What happened to her?" "She was surfin' behind me in a large wave and I guess it knocked her under the water, she was under for close to five minutes I would say." "Thank you. Why don't you hop in the back of the ambulance along with her and we'll escort you two to the hospital as fast as we can." "Thank you lad, you've been a great help already." "It's all part of the job." The ride to the hospital was strange, I myself had never needed to ride in an ambulance and there was a lot of stuff to look around at. I found some rubber gloves and stuffed a couple in my back pocket when the paramedics weren't looking. The had Jessica hooked up to a small machine that had her pulse and they had her leg elevated and in a splint, I guess it was broken. When we got to the hospital I was told to wait in the waiting room. I hated waiting. After a little while I decided to go and explore, I might as well, this could be a while. I found where the restrooms where, a few snack machines and lots of hospital beds, they all looked really comfortable. It was nearing ten o'clock when I found my way back to the waiting room. I sat back down and looked for something to read, I was getting really nervous and anxious. I thought I should probably call Sharon Browne the producer of Celtic Thunder to tell her I might not be able to make it to rehearsals the next week if Jessica still wasn't awake. So I rang her up. She answered on the second ring. "Hello?" she answered/ "Hey Sharon, its Keith, I'm calling to let you know that Jessica was in a surfing accident and she's unconscious." "Oh no, that's horrible, do the doctors know how long she's unconscious for?" "I haven't seen anybody for a couple hours. I'm stuck in the waiting room and I thought I'd give you a call to let you know that I might not make it to rehearsals next week." "Ok, thanks for letting me know Keith." "Alrighty. Talk to you later Sharon bye." A couple minutes later a nurse came out and asked for the name Harkin. I raised my hand to prove that was me and I started walking towards the nurse. I immediately started asking questions, "Is Jessica going to be alright? How bad is she hurt? Is she conscious?"
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Sept 8, 2009 18:42:28 GMT -5
"Is Jessica going to be alright? How bad is she hurt? Is she conscious?" "Sir please, I know you're anxious but all the doctors know about Mrs. Harkin is that she is still unconscious and she has a broken left leg that needs to be put in a cast, do you have a color recommendation?" she said. "Oh, sorry. Jess really likes the color pink, could she have a pink cast please?" "Surely. Now, the doctors already have a room made for Mrs. Harkin and said that you are aloud to meet them there." "Ok, that sounds great. Thanks, um... where is it?" "Room B 37." "Alrighty thanks." I then made my way to room B 37 and began the long wait for me beautiful wife. Around midnight the doctors brought Jessica into the room, I was watching the surf channel half asleep with so many things on my mind. Was Jess going to be alright? What happens if she doesn't make it? This is all MY fault. She’s never going surfing again. What am I going to do? I then saw her. Jessica looked like a wreck. There were band-aids everywhere on Jess's body, from head to toe. She also had this huge cast from the middle of her thigh to he foot, and of course it was hot pink. Her eyes were closed and you could tell she was in a deep sleep. The doctors and nurse hooked her up with more machines and things. I needed to know if she was going to survive. "Excuse me, doctor?" I asked "Yes?" He answered. "Do you know if Jess is going to make it or not?" "I'm sorry to inform you, but we don't know yet honestly. We'll have some more things to test and things to look at before we know for sure." "Oh, well thanks for the update." "No problem, now you have a good night sir. You're more then welcome to go home, or stay here on one of the couches in here for the night.” he said as he left. I was ready to cry. They still don't know if my wife was going to live. And I would never leave my unconscious wife to go to a hotel and spend the night, in my opinion, that is just bad. I was going to stay by her side all the way to the end. I then decided I was ready for bed. I got myself a pillow and a blanket and made a nice bed for the night and drifted off to sleep. The next morning I woke up with a strange melody in my head. It didn't have words but I could hear guitar chords roaming around my head and it sounded very melodious. I went down to the cafeteria with the same tune stuck in my head. I ate a blueberry muffin with some coffee and tried to work out some words. I decided I wanted to go back to the hotel and grab my beloved tangle wood guitar Smokey.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Sept 12, 2009 20:49:11 GMT -5
here's a little update for ye all...
I took a taxi back to the hotel, grabbed my guitar as fast as I could and some paper and a pen. The taxi driver took me back to the hospital and I paid him and went back to the cafeteria. I started fooling around with some chords, putting a couple spins on various ones and came up with the melody that's been stuck in my head, so I wrote them down. I had close to the whole melody down with the background chords along with it when I started noticing people gathering around and some spare change in my guitar case. I smiled and thanked all of them and went back to the chords. I decided to finally work on the lyrics, but something caught my mind. I still didn't know if Jess, my smiles, my life, my love, was going to make it. And if she didn't, I never got to say good-bye. I then knew what the lyrics to this song where going to be. I started off with these... My time here has come to say good - bye And I don't know how I don't know why And I'm askin' you to do these things So we're in love's all I can be The things we've done the things we do The things I give to only you Please don't forget me for who I am Cause I'm just me my own man I then knew how miserable I was going to be without Jess. It made me write more, as tears started coming to me eyes. I then thought of a chorus Please don't forget me ----- Please don't forget me ----- Forget me not It wasn't much of one, but it worked. I was writing all of this down on the now tear stained paper. I couldn't stop writing; I then finished up the song with these, You know we've been through good and bad And I hope they'll remember and be glad Cause I don't want ill - thoughts in their head Forgive me what I said
Please don't forget me ----- Please don't forget me ----- Forget me not
Please don't forget me ----- Please don't forget me ----- Please don't forget me ----- Forget me not This was the truth for me and Jess, my Smiles. We'd been through a lot over the years. And if I couldn't be with her anymore, I would have nothing. She was my other half. And yet, here in the hospital cafeteria, I had know idea if Jessica Harkin would ever live again. If my Smiles would ever come through again. Smiles, I think I wanted to call her that if she ever lived through this, it suited her. She was always smiling. I started to flashback to all the great times Jess and I have had together. One particular memory when we were dating stood out to me. We were at the beach just hanging out. "Keith, have I ever told u how much I loved you?" Jess asked. "You do all the time love." I replied kissing her. We then starting looking up at the stars, it was one of the many things that we both loved to do. We lay there on our beach towels in our swimsuits she was cuddled up against me and pointing out the star constellations. That night was the night that I knew that I wanted to spend the rest of my life with Jessica Cross. I came back to reality and played my new song over and over again. I still had tears every now and then but I started to get over it. I still needed a title to my new song, simple enough; I called it, Don't Forget Me.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Sept 18, 2009 17:21:02 GMT -5
I came back to reality and played my new song over and over again. I still had tears every now and then but I started to get over it. I still needed a title to my new song, simple enough, I called it, Don't Forget Me. I went back up to the room where Jess was and it was just after lunchtime. She still wasn't up yet. I was starting to loose hope, but I wanted her, but I needed her more. I thought it would be good for me to take a walk to the beach to try to get my mind off things for a bit. When I got there, the waves immediately started to lift my mind. I wanted to go surfing really bad, but I knew I couldn't because of well, the accident. all the emotions started coming back then I decided I wanted to go back to the hospital to see how my Smiles was doing. As I was walking back I saw a little gift shop shack looking thing. I walked over to it and checked it out. What they were selling there were little personalized surfboard necklaces. I saw there was a pink and green one that looked just like Jessica's surfboard. so I asked the guy if I could take a look at it, he let me and it was so close to how Jess's surfboard looked it was amazing. The only thing missing from it was our initials carved into it. I wanted to know if the man could carve that into the surfboard. "um lad, sorry to bother you again, but could u perhaps engrave something onto this one for me?" I asked. "Do ya got the money for it?" The man working the shack replied. "Yes I do." "Then what would you like on it then sir?" "Could you put JH+KH in a heart please? Like in the middle of the board?" "Sure thing just give me a minute or two and it'll be ready it'll be 20 dollars please." "Yea of course." I gave him the money and he gave me the necklace. When Jess wakes up, I wanted to give this to her, since her real board was broken in the water. It was perfect. I then wanted to go back to the hospital. My Smiles could be waking up any time now. When I got back to the hospital it was nearly lunchtime. I was eating a peanut butter and jelly sandwich when the nurse from last night came up to me. I wasn't ready for any bad news, I tried to brace myself for her to tell me that Jess was gone. I started to tear up again. "Mr. Harkin? I just want to let you know that Mrs. Harkin has just woken up and is looking for you." "REALLY?!" "Yes, really." she laughed. "THAT'S FANTASTIC!" I yelled. I then picked up the nurse and gave her a huge hug. "Can I go see her?" "Yes you can, just you have to be on the more relaxed side with her." "Yes, yes of course!" I was so excited. MY WIFE WAS ALIVE! I then started running toward the elevator. I was ecstatic! I couldn't wait to see my Smiles eyes open wide and smiling again. When I got to the room I smiled the biggest smile I could. She was alive! it was the greatest thing I had ever seen, she was smiling back at me too. My Smiles. I just wanted to pick her up and whirl her around and kiss her. instead I walked over to her and cried out to her, "Jessica! You're alive!!" I kissed her forehead gently. and she laughed. It felt so good to hear her laugh again. "I was so worried about you! the doctors said you broke your shin and scraped and bruised the rest of your body real bad." I continued. "I'm so sorry, I wasn't looking where I was going, I didn't know what I was doing..." she said with her sweet smooth voice. I started getting all worked up again, this was all my fault. "No, No, shhh, it was me, I should've never taken you to that big of a wave on ye first day surfing! this is all my fault" "Dear, it's ok it's ok." She stroked my long blonde hair. She knew I shouldn't feel guilty.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Sept 24, 2009 19:33:58 GMT -5
Just then there was a knock on the door, it was Damian and Kaitlyn hand in hand. My best mate Damian McGinty had fallen in love with my Smiles best friend Kaitlyn Bryer, they were great together. "Hi guys," Jessica said perking up. "what crackin'?" "Apparently your leg clumsy." Kaitlyn laughed "How did you guys get here?" Jessica asked. "As soon as we heard what happened, you wanted to help as soon as we could." Damian said. I wondered how they heard, I only told Sharon about this.. "Plus we wouldn't let our two best friends stay alone in Bali while they're injured." Kaitlyn added. "Thanks so much for coming you two" Jessica and I said. Damian and I went out into the hallway to talk so Kaitlyn and Jessica were left alone. "Take good care of her Kate," I said winking. "Will do Keith!" She called back. When Damian and I got into the hall I started asking questions. "Ok, how did you find out?" I asked. "Sharon called all of us early this morning saying that rehearsals were possibly canceled for next week and I wondered why. She explained your situation and I felt bad so Kaitlyn and I flew here on the first available flight. I wasn't gonna bail on one of my best mates when he's stuck like this. Oh! and by the way, me and Kaitlyn are staying for the rest of the week." Damian explained. "thanks lad. You better leave us alone... this is our private time lad! Did any of the others wanna come by? " Just then I saw Paul walking down the hallway with a huge "Get Well Soon" balloon and a few other colored ones in his hands. He was walking with the rest of the lads as well, George, and Ryan. George had a bouquet of flowers and Ryan had one as well. "Aww, thanks lads, you didn't have to do this!" I said. "But we had to! its the polite thing to do ya know." Paul said trying to hit me with a balloon. "Besides, you got us out of rehearsals! what else are we going to do now?" Ryan asked me. Then i heard Jessica calling from inside her room, "Hey babe? Who's out there with ya?" "It's the rest of the lads honey! They came to see ya!" i replied. As if one cue we all headed back into the room and Paul started tying balloons all over the room. "Paul what are you doing!?" "It's called having fun mate! you should try it!" he smirked. "I know how to have fun!" i went over to try to tackle him. When i gave up Paul headed into the bathroom and was looking for something, then he came out with the soaps in his hand. "Paul, this isn't a hotel, and even there you're not supposed to take the soaps from there!" I said laughing. Paul can be quite the character sometimes. Paul and I went to thumb wrestle by the window with Damian as our ref. while Ryan and George were talking with Kaitlyn and Jess. We were chanting the official thumb wrestling chant when the nurse came in a told Jess she needed some tests done to make sure she could go home in the morning. I knew Jessica didn't like hospitals and the way she shoed all of us out of that room proved it to me even more. Paul and I continued thumb wrestling with Damian facing the winner. Whoever one this match was the winner. George and Ryan got in on the fun too. I beet Paul so i had to face Damian. "One two three four i declare a thumb war--" i started. "Five six seven eight try to keep your thumb straight!" Damian finished. We started played and i was just about to beet Damian when the nurse came back down the hall with Jess and all the balloons Paul tied to the bed. I quickly pushed Damian out of the way so i could get the results on when we could get outta here. The nurse called me in and told Damian that we would finish this later.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Oct 1, 2009 18:42:06 GMT -5
"All right Mr. and Mrs. Harkin it looks you guys can check out tomorrow morning," the nurse said with a smile on her face. "That's wonderful!" I said with the biggest smile on my face. The two of us were extremely relieved. After the nurse left, the room was filled again. Jessica's parents had also flown out here but were only staying till tomorrow along with the lads. Kaitlyn and Damian decided to vacation here for the rest of the week. A couple hours went by and everyone had left so it was just my Smiles and I. I ordered myself some dinner and offered Jess some but she claimed she wasn't hungry. The nurse continued coming in everyone couple hours and checking on her. But in the meantime we would talk. "You know Jess, you gave me the scare of my life." I started. "I'm so sorry Keith I never meant for anything bad to happen." she said. I moved onto the bed next to her. I didn't want to tell her how scared i was, but i knew i had to, it was for her own good. "I didn't see you come out of that wave, and I started looking for you, you must've been under the water for 5 minutes. When I heard you calling my name I was so terrified. I saw you barely above the surface and I swam to you with my board as fast as I could. You were just about to go under again when I pulled you up. I saw you're surfboard was in pieces all over the ocean. While I pulled you up, I noticed from your knee down your whole leg didn't look good at all. It was all twisted and gross, I tried asking you how bad you felt but you wouldn't wake up. You're arms were all scraped up and bleeding. I felt so bad. I never want you to get hurt like this again." I wanted to cry, but i shouldn't, and i had already made Jessica i didn't want that to happen. "But baby, I'm here now, and I'm alive. We're going to be alright." Her voice was shaking. "No. When you were unconscious, I didn't know what I would do if I ever lost you, I wouldn't be able to take it." I was getting mad at myself again. She began stoking my hair again and I started to calm down. Whenever something rough happened to me, or i needed to be calmed down my Smiles would always stoke my hair, it felt nice. I laid back on the bed and Jess lay her head on my chest, and we both fell asleep for the night. When i woke up i was greeted by my wife's smile. "Good morning sleepyhead!" she greeted. Jess was up before me, that was unusual... maybe something was wrong, i started to panic and ask questions, "Good morning darlin'. Did you sleep ok? Do you need anything? I can go get the nurse if you want." "I'm perfectly fine for my condition. I slept just fine, I don't need anything but you right now." She said as she kissed me softly on my lips. I wanted to kiss her more but we could finish that later. Just then my nurse came into the room. "Good morning Harkin family!" she cheered. "How's everyone doing this morning?" "Tired." I said simply, and it was true. i hadn't gotten a lot of sleep lately with everything that's been going on. Jessica and the nurse kept talking about her leg and conditions and stuff while i just stared out the window thinking about my newest song again. I still haven't told Smiles about it yet... Then i heard the nurse say we have the clear to go home so i decided to thank her for her troubles. "Thanks a lot lass, you've been a great help." i said as she left. Jessica and i ate the rest of our breakfast in quiet, for once we ran out of things to talk about. There were still two days left until the plane would leave to go back to our small cozy apartment back in Chicago. We checked out of the hospital and got to the parking lot when Jess asked me, "Keith, how did we get to the hospital?"
"Oh an ambulance took ya hun." "Okaaayy, so how are we going to get to the hotel?" She said with a laugh I totally forgot about that one... I needed a back up plan... i quickly took out my cell phone and called Damian. He picked up on the third ring. "Hello?" Damian answered "Hey it's Keith, um... can you give us a ride back to our hotel.." "Keith, its obviously you, there's thing wonderful thing called caller ID ya know, and sure Kaitlyn and I will be there shortly, are you in the parking lot right?" "Yupp, see ya in a few! Bye!" When we got back to our hotel we invited Kaitlyn and Damian to come on in for little while. They agreed and we sat down on the beds i helped Jess with the now huge cast one her leg. "Look what i got!" Damian said pulling a sharpie out of his back pocket.
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Post by VolleyErica3 on Oct 5, 2009 16:02:42 GMT -5
Heres the ending of the story let me know if u want a sequal or anything. Doubt there will b one since im not getting much feedback enjoy "Greeeaaaat." i said "C'mon let's sign it!" Kaitlyn cheered. I glared at Damian. "You did this on purpose." "no.. i just so happened to have a sharpie on my mate, there nothing wrong with that!" "what ever." i said pushing him off the side. which reminded me we still never finished that thumb war.... "Make sure you leave enough room for Paul to sign lads!" Damian joked. When it was my turn to sign I thought about what i could write. I decided to leave some of the lyrics to don't forget me. i wrote, "So we're in love's all I can be The things we've done the things we do, please don't forget me love keef" Kaitlyn and Damian eventually left to go to their hotel, leaving me and my Smiles to ourselves. we went to bed that night and woke up the next morning not knowing what to do. it was our last day in Bali and we wanted to do something fun that we both could do. "what if we go down to the beach and eat dinner close to the shore but not too close to the shore." Jessica suggested. "sounds great, I'll grab our towels and stuff. But first i want to pack our stuff so we don't have to rush in the morning." "aww, thanks sweetie. do you help?" "nope i should be fine. you need to rest with your foot up." I packed all of our things and double checked to make sure we had everything all while whistling don't forget me. When i was done i grabbed a couple beach towels and some money and swept Jess off her feet and carried her to the elevator, all while she was giggling like a maniac. We got to the beach and ate our dinner and by time it was gone, the stars were out. My Smiles laid on my chest like she now always does, and was showing me all the constellations she knew, it was like when we were dating all over again. Jess fell asleep on my and i had to carry her back to our hotel room. The next morning i was loading our luggage into the taxi we got for on the way to the airport and something fell out of my suitcase. It was a small red box. I picked it up and looked inside. It was the surfboard necklace. I still hadn't given it to Jess yet. i decided i would on the plane. We got onto the plane and Jessica was hopping higher than a jumping bean with excitement to get on a plane again. i held the little red box in my hand waiting to give it to her. We snuggled up together and about an hour into the flight I said, "Darlin' when you were in the hospital unconscious, I went down to a gift shop down the road and picked this out for you." I handed her the small red box and she just stared at it, and after about a minute of just staring at it, she started to cry. I wondered why. "Oh honey there's no need to cry about this, I love you." I kissed her forehead. "So are ya going to open it?" "Sure babe," she smiled a weak but wonderful smile and opened the small red box. "I had it made just for you, love." i said smiling as she started to cry again. "Thank you so much! I love it! I'll keep it forever. But why did you get it?" "This one can last longer than a real one." She laid on my shoulder and cuddled up next to me as I put the chain around her neck. For the remainder of the plane ride, the two of us fell asleep cuddled up and we didn't wake up until the end of the plane ride. We got our luggage and hailed a cab so we could go back to our nice 2 bedroom apartment and start a family, yet i still had to tell her about my newest of songs... THE END
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Post by maureenj on Nov 9, 2009 22:22:26 GMT -5
Ooh... I really enjoyed reading this. I hope you will consider continuing the story. It'd be interesting to see how they will interact once back home and how he will tell her about the song...
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